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July 21, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday 7/22/12

       
          Happy Sunday everyone!  Hopefully I'll get a chance to read all the posts today, but my time is even more limited than normal.  This Sunday I'm posting six sentences that I just wrote.  I mean that quite literally as I just spent the last few hours continuing my work on draft one of The Mythical Male. I hope you enjoy this bit where I just left off.  
        Tovi (the "Mythical" male) and Ziki (The girl who recently learned it's no myth) are in the middle of a rather passionate make-out session near the pool when Tovi's conscious gets the better of him...for a moment.


             Tovi stopped suddenly and rolled off her.  “I can’t do this,” he said as he gasped for air.  "It's not right."

            “Please, don’t stop,” Ziki said as she climbed onto him, desperate to be touching him in some way.  She pressed her lips against his and gently nibbled his lower lip.  He gave in. 

They exchanged tongues in a passionate rage, pressing their bodies against one another.  Their suits came off, and just as Ziki thought they couldn’t possibly be any closer, they were.  

  
  As always I welcome your comments and I hope you'll check out all of the great writers at Six Sentence Sunday.  I would also like to take this opportunity to shamelessly ask you to check out some of my other posts and give me some much needed feedback. Thank again!

14 comments:

  1. Love the scene but especially that last line. The intensity is amazing :)

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  2. Very intense. Well done, Samantha!

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  3. Is it hot in here? ;D

    Great scene!

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  4. Well done! But where did the mythical man come from?

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  5. IL think you mean conscience rather than conscious. The actual scene is intense, though he gives in awfully quickly. P.S. Captcha's are turning into eye tests, and my vision isn't that good. PLEASE turn it off for SSS.

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    1. Great catch! I would have never noticed (and my spelling is awful as it is.) I'll be looking for how to turn off Captcha. I hate those things and I didn't even know I had it on here. Thanks for the help!

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  6. Hot six, he didn't take much persuading to continue!

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  7. The lower lip is a very sensual part. Sexy!

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  8. very good six. She's quite pushy. :)

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  9. The last line here is great. A fantastic hook :)

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  10. Wow. Enjoyed the hot read (it is mid Monday morning for me, though, lol) and am wondering where I can get those instant-off suits around here. I'm always fumbling around with some strap or other on mine.

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