My First Six Sentence Sunday

      I chose a paragraph from from my work in progress The Mythical Male.  Basically, the main character -Ziki has grown up on an all female settlement on the moon and is seeing a man for the first time in her life after her pod crashed in his back yard.  Six Sentence Sunday -here we go!

She peeked around the sheltering tree to analyze the situation and saw the most unusual creature.  It had the general form of a human, but its chest was too flat and hairy, the hips on the creature were far too narrow, and it had an odd appendage between its legs.  As the strange being moved a towel away from its head, Ziki saw that it also had a too-wide jawbone covered in thick, dark stubble.  Despite the creature’s deformities and the risk surrounding its presence, she found it to be aesthetically pleasing. She suddenly realized that her favorite myth was standing just a few feet away and she was in even more danger than she thought. She looked for a quick escape.

 I welcome any (constructive) comments.  Full chapters-in-progress can often be found on critiquecircle.com as works to be critiqued.  Hopefully someday they will come together to be a published novel.  :)  Check out other writer's six sentences: just click the link under "My Pages".  One of these days I'll figure out how to add logos and links to this thing.